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The tale of seven goodbyes

The following post is a short story written in the the form of a poem with seven chapters or “Seven Goodbyes” and every chapter is a Fiction 77. Scratching your head? Well, don’t, just read it and enjoy. I hope you guys like it. Don’t forget to leave your feedback in the comment section.


***The first goodbye – the store***

“Hey!” a voice so sweet called out

A sound so magical, I quickly turned around

“She’s hot, she can’t be calling me.” I thought

Wondering for whom it was, I looked here and there

“Hey, I am talking to you.” She said with a stare

“Is this your’s? You left it at the store.”

“Yes, it is! Thank you very much!”

“Your welcome” she said, with a twinkle in her eye

I smiled as she bid goodbye.

***The second Goodbye – goodbye to my dreams***

I sat on my chair looking hypnotized

With thoughts of the morning’s surprise

“Oh my God!”

Exclaimed a face staring at mine

“He’s my only brother, don’t do this to him”

“He’s in love, I know his chances are pretty slim!”

“Stop that rubbish, it’s not what you think.”

“I am just in a good mood, stop giving me that wink.”

“I have to forget.” I told myself with a sigh

As I bid my dreams goodbye

***The third goodbye – there is no saying goodbye***

The night was dark, the rains pouring hard

The roads blocked, the traffic stood still

Among the crazy noises, I heard a voice, shrill

A girl all wet was trying to make her way through

“Hey store lady, hop into my car!”

It took her a while to recognize

And I found her inside before I realized

Smiles through the miles, I was on a high

Yes, I was in love, now there was no saying goodbye

***The fourth goodbye – I wish there is no goodbye***

SMSes turned to phone calls

I soon found myself shopping at the malls

Lunches, dinners and ice-cream

Every single moment felt like a dream

Embarrassing acts were now fun to do

“The world means nothing”, I told myself

All that matters is me and you

Intimate, mushy conversations and the occasional fight

Everything was brilliant, it all felt so right

But there was always a fear, I don’t know why

Was there ever gonna be a goodbye?

***The fifth goodbye – the betrayal***

“I love you” I said after a romantic speech

Sitting on the beach

She looked at me as if I had gone mad

“Are you kidding me? We have had loads of fun.”

“But that’s all that can be done.”

“Where are you and where am I?!”

“I thought you were different, but you’re just another stupid guy.”

My heart was heavy and I wanted to cry

But I walked away from there without even saying goodbye.

***The sixth goodbye – end of a chapter?***

“I’ll never forgive you.” I said to myself holding my head

“The words that you said I shall never forget.

I know I said I loved you

I hate you more than I can ever do.

You didn’t even deserve my friendship forget my love

I’ll make you suffer the way I am now

I swear by the lord above

You were right where are you and where am I

It’s time to say a final goodbye.”

***The final goodbye – three years later***

“Hey!” I shouted behind the lady who left her bag

“Is this your’s? You left it at the store.”

“Yes, it is! Thank you very much!” Said a familiar sound

And I saw her guilt-writen face as she turned around

“Thank you”, I said after a pause “for showing me what love felt like.”

“I promised myself all I wanted was, to see you cry.

But I am just glad today that I can finally say goodbye.”

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67 Responses to "The tale of seven goodbyes"

  1. Abhiram says:

    You know why your blog is so good? It is so raw, and perfect the way it is. You don’t go trying to make it look good. Keep on going. Loving every single post. Wishing that there was a little ‘devil’ residing in me too.

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thanks Abhi! Btw there is a devil within u and u know that… ive told u that a million times…. u just have to let it come out…

  2. Vibhuti B says:

    WOW, this is indeed very awesome Tavish.
    You tell a story like a romantic bard.
    And every Goodbye was more interesting than the previous leading me on to read what happens next?
    Creativity at its best!
    ATB for BATOM 13

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Romantic bard haan? wow… thats some compliment… thanks Vibhs… all the best to u too! :)

  3. Samadrita says:

    Awesome Tavish! I have no other words.
    All the best for BAT!

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thanks Samadrita! :)

  4. Leo says:

    wow.. nice one Tavish..! a love story in rhyme..

    all the best for BATOM..!

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thanks Leo… glad u liked it…

  5. Raj says:

    Superb! :) Superb!

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thanks buddy! :)

  6. Leo says:

    dude.. u r amazing.. love story in a poem and u did it effortlessly!

    all the best for BATOM!

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thanks again… all the best to u too! :)

  7. gkam says:

    A tale of goodbyes.
    Very very nice. With emphasis on the Very.

    ATB for BAT13
    Gkam – Goodbye

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Hey thanks buddy… will read ur entry soon too… all the best to u too!

  8. Rumya says:

    Loved the style of writing which even had a glint of humor in it. Enjoyed all your goodbyes!! :)
    A nice love poem, which was very unusually done….And even felt sorry for the “I” in this poem who was betrayed.

    Outstanding lines:
    ** “I hate you more than I can ever do.
    You didn’t even deserve my friendship forget my love”

    ** “Thank you”, I said after a pause “for showing me what love felt like.”

    ** “But I am just glad today that I can finally say goodbye.”

    Excellently done Tavish!! Simple and Sweet!!
    ATB for BAT 13!! :D

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Hey thanks Rumya… u have done some analysis haven’t u! SOme of the lines u mentioned are my fav too… all th best to u too Rumya… :)

  9. Dreamer says:

    Excellent! A simple story within a poem, which totally elevates it. Made for smooth, easy reading! All the best for BATOM!

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thanks allot buddy… all the best to u too! :)

  10. Rajlakshmi says:

    thats a beautifully narrated story…
    different kinds of goodbyes blended beautifully :)

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thanks Rajlakshmi glad u liked it!! :)

  11. Pushpee says:

    Very lyrical and well told..seemed like a song sung on guitar humming ‘goodbye’ as end stroke. This fiction 77 is nice way to present a song, enjoyed this post :))

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Hey thank u! will try composing a tune for it…. was actually thinking of having that as a BAT entry too this time… will reserve it for the next BAT :P

  12. Perhaps, I dont Hate Love Story!
    Awesome effort!
    :)
    ~Keep the Spark ALive..

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thanks allot Rachana!

  13. Hi buddy, your blog’s design is simple and clean and i like it. Your blog posts are superb. Please keep them coming. Greets!!!

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thank u so much!

  14. Nice Sonnet Tavish….. it was captivating….
    and a variations of emotions,well captured..

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Hey thanks Aabid… glad u liked it… thanks for paying a visit :)

  15. Megz says:

    oiieeeeeeeeeee………..ekdum fataaaannggg :D :D :D
    mastttt likha hai :D
    all the best for BAT..
    muje hairaani nai hogi if u win it again :P

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      aww thank u so much Meggie… tere moo mein ghee shakar…. oops sorry thanks nahi thankiies :P

  16. Phoenixritu says:

    Now this is sheer originality! Brilliant! I loved this saga of goodbyes

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Hey thanks Ritu di… gla du liked it :)

  17. Tuppence says:

    tavish
    That was just a perfect read!
    Love story – fitted into the different kinds of good-bye.
    the good-bye said with anticipation and longing to be able to meet again – the love at first sight times..
    the good-bye said with a silly-love-lost heart , not wanting to say bye to the good flirting times…
    the good-bye forced on you by your love
    the good-bye said with :) all the confidence in the world after recovering!!

    I just loved it!! Brilliant effort!

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thank u so much my friend… i am flattered… glad u liked it! :)

  18. Parth J Dave says:

    What a riveting and brilliant piece of fiction, Tavish bhai! This ingenious and lovely post makes me want to read it again and again!!!

    You are one heck of an outstanding writer, Tavish! The world needs more awesome and creative people like you!

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thank u so much Parth. I feel so touched by your lovely words. Readers like u mean the world to me… thank allot once again :)

  19. devilzangel says:

    hey der…a really nice take on d topic n a well written 7-part poem :D

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thanks u so much my friend… welcome to Sensible Bakwas :)

  20. Vee says:

    Whoa! So many goodbyes, and each one is equally good. :)

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thank you so much my friend. i am glad u liked it. :)

  21. Shahid says:

    This was very innovative tavish…you are one helluva writer man!!!…and finally i am back on the blogosphere …hope i stay here for sometime!!!

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thanks Shahid… and yes i am glad u r back… looking fwd to reading some of ur amazing stuff… :)

  22. Hi Tavish,
    How you’ve been, looks like i have missed a lot. I saw your music video. Excellent bro, very well done. Your rhyme here is good as ever, my best wishes to you

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Hey Harsha, yes buddy long time no see. Thanks for checking out the video and am glad u liked it. Thanks for your lovely comments….

      Cheers!

  23. Amity says:

    Tavish! the geat Tavish!

    you’re an answer to a question! thumbs up!

    you always make innovations and i like it! sensible really!

    all the best for BAT! :)

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thank u so much for the kind words Amity. I am glad u liked it. All the best to you too! :)

  24. Tavish,

    As usual you are at your best, i love rhymming it..
    Template looks very cool and also your way of presenting things are also great.. superb man…

    Yours Frendly,
    Saravana Kumar M

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thanks allot Saravana for your kind words. I a really glad u liked it! :)

  25. Really really good. Very powerful, and so real-like.

    Thank you for this.

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Well, I should be thanking you for your comments!! :)

      Thanks allot for the appreciations. I am glad you liked it. :)

  26. Vipul Grover says:

    Hey Tavish, really creative post.. The story told was not new bt definitely the presentation made all the difference.. 7 77-Fictions in form of a poem, gr8 wrk :)
    ATB!!!

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      thanks allot buddy… this is something I have been wanting to do for a pretty logntime actually… earlier thought of 10 fiction 55s but then settled for 7 77-fictions… it was tough and am just glad its left the desired effect on ppl… all the best to u too buddy! :)

  27. Viyoma says:

    Its the novelty of the idea..tht strikes every1 down!!
    All the best for BATOM-13!

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thanks Viyoma. i am glad and to be honest relieved that it had the desired effect… all the best to u too! :)

  28. Keerthi P says:

    That has to be the most creative post in the entire BAT! Your effort shows and hope it pays off. :)
    For a moment there, I expected some sad ending or revenge with that “I shall never forgive you”. But unexpected and awesome ending.

    All the best!

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      :) am glad the eding surprised u and thanks allot for the kind appreciations… am glad its having the desired effect… all the best to u too!! :)

  29. Guddu says:

    Excellent.. All da best :)

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thanks allot buddy!! :D

  30. Mayur says:

    Honest words :) Beautifully written!

    This is the first time I visited your blog….and i m sure i ll keep visiting again and again :)

    All the best for BAT!!!

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Hey Mayur, in case u thinking this is my story… ITS NOT! :) it was totally out of pure imagination.

      Anyways thank u so much for your kind comments… and a very warm welcome tom Sensible Bakwas. :)

  31. Hiyaa says:

    You never let me down! I totally love your posts and this one was a really good one!
    All the best!

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Thank u so much Sandy. I really glad to hear from u after a pretty long time! Thanks for your lovely words :)

  32. Anshul Dixit says:

    Hi Tavish…I like reading your blog… Don’t remember if i ever left a comment though, because I am always at loss with words after reading your posts :)..

    Awesome… just awesome.. loved it write from the beginning till the end.. nice flow.. touched the cords of my heart..

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      Hey Anshul thank u so much for your kind words! Good to see your comment here… am glad u liked it… :)

  33. vikita jain says:

    I heard “alvida kehne se milne ki umeed mar jati”.. yeh tumhara wala alvida mujhe kehta hai – har pal naya hai, har mulakat nayi hai..aur ek nayi kahani..

    1. Tavish Chadha says:

      :) yahi toh zindagi hai… har pal naya hai aur har pal nayi kahani… :)
      waise tumhara comment padhe ke baad mujhe lagta hai ke tumhe kavitayien likhni chahiye… kafi poetic comment tha :)

      anyways thanks allot for that… :)

  34. Vamsi says:

    Man, I thought you wrote this recently.. pretty old huh?

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