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Fiction 55: Shift + Delete

Fiction 55 is a form of writing where the whole story has to fit in 55 words. This is my first attempt on writing fiction 55. Hope you guys like it. Please do leave your comments so that I know what you felt about the post:
Sonia dumped Ram one night…
Shit+Delete
Ram thought he deleted her from the hard disk of his heart
2 years later he still feels the pain…
Cupid come’s to check what’s wrong
He checks and says……
“Shift key doesn’t work. She was stuck in the recycle bin and I can’t get her out.”

I know its needless to say this but Ram and Sonia are fictitious characters and bear no resemblence to anybody living or on the verge of death.(I guess the dead wont mind).

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Tavish is the administrator and founder of Sensible Bakwas. He is a software engineer by profession and a writer by passion. In case you want to get in touch with him, he is an email away at tavish.chadha@gmail.com. Hope you enjoy your time here. Do leave your feedback in the comment section here.

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34 Responses to "Fiction 55: Shift + Delete"

  1. Shruti says:

    It was really good tavish! Cupid is the engineer eh? U are too addicted to computers I guess :P

    But it was a wonderful attempt re :)
    Two thumbs up from my side :)

    P.S : Check the number of words before u publish! Generally 55Fictions must have only 55 words or less.. Your 55F has 58 I think.. Am sorry, but I have this habit of counting the numb of words in every 55F i write :)

    Hope u don mind

  2. Tavish Chadha says:

    Hey Shruti… thanks so much for checking it out and the wonderful comments… well i am a s/w guy so I am bound to be addicted hehehe…

    btw i just checked it again using word and it says 55 words… :)

    and why the would i mind… critical comments are more than welcome… they help me improve :)

    cheers!
    Tavish

  3. Shruti says:

    Oye, it has 58 words exactly! Try this : http://www.wordcounttool.com/

  4. Tavish Chadha says:

    yeah i checked the tool… and yes it does say 58… but when i typed it in word it says 55… one thing i realized was shift+delete was taken as 1 word in word and as 2 words in the tool… i guess ill safely stick to work and fell happy about it… hehehe

  5. Shruti says:

    obviously shift and delete are two diff words :P

  6. Saurabh Panshikar says:

    Nice going. Nice try. I counted 57 words… You can go on, add a few and create a drabble.

  7. Tavish Chadha says:

    @Shruti: word doesn't think so… :P

  8. Tavish Chadha says:

    @Saurabh: nice to see you back! Thanks for the comments… i dont know.. its either something wrong with my counting I guess… whatever…ill just make it fiction 57 i guess hehhee

  9. Tavish Chadha says:

    here you are… removed 2 words to make it 55 :)

  10. Shruti says:

    LOL Saurabh :P
    Drabble needs 100 words :D

  11. Tavish Chadha says:

    naaa its easier deleting 2 words rather than adding 45 :P :)

  12. Magali says:

    Hey cool. Love… tech style.

  13. Magali says:

    One more thing- I attempted 55 fiction just once. At that time, I was told tht 55 fiction needed to have a twist at the end. The ending shouldn't be predictable.But the ending was sorta predictable here too! But it was a wonderful first attempt! Please don't take this the wrong way!

  14. Tavish Chadha says:

    Hey Magali… thank u so much for the comments… i just read ur F55.. its was brilliant… ive put my comments there… well i didnt know that the end should be non-predictable… will keep that in mind the next time I write a F55…

    Cheers!
    Tavish

  15. Neeraj Bhushan says:

    Wonderful, Smart Place This. Best.

  16. Magali says:

    You're welcome! I didn't know either!

  17. Vipul Grover says:

    Hey, Tavish congo for the frst attmpt.. A nice use of computer lingo :)
    Keep trying with other styles nd genres :)

  18. Lakshmi Rajan says:

    A good attempt for first time. And ya, an unpredictable twist adds a zing to 55F. But then who cares if the piece of writing is enjoyable even without it. Its sounds a geeky 55f :)

    btw, even if you shift+delete, data can always be retrieved you see ;) that's how feelings of ex-flames are :D

  19. Tavish Chadha says:

    @neeraj: welcome to my blog! Am glad you liked it. Hope to see you back soon!

    @magali: :)

  20. Tavish Chadha says:

    @Vupul: Thank you so much sir. Will definitely try different styles in the future! :)

    Lakshmi: Thanks Lakshmi…lol yeah i guess thats the way these feels are :)
    will try to keep it unpredictable next time

  21. eLitWit says:

    Lol very nice! My first visit to your blog… well my Escape key is not working.. maybe you can come up with something for that too :P

  22. Oxymoron says:

    hey…nice attempt…it's tough writing a story in 55 words….do give m blog a visit sometime…

  23. Nethra says:

    You have a nice sense of humor. Though it was a sad story, I couldn't stop a smile. :)

  24. Yemiledu says:

    Enjoyed!
    55 fictions are always sweet to read..but unfortunately i forget them in a day or two unlike short or long stories:)

  25. Tavish Chadha says:

    @eLitWit: lol… am glad the escape key isn't working… hehe… welcome to my blog…hope to see u around more often :)
    @Oxymoron: Welcome to my blog.. will be visiting your blog soon. :)
    @Nethra: Thanks for those comments Nethra… am glad i cud get smile on u :)
    welcome to the blog…
    @Archana: the solution to that is that u keep visiting my blog every time u forget this post!! hehe… thanks for the comments :)

  26. Dagny Taggart says:

    :) neat!!!
    I was wondering what this 55 fiction was and finally i solved the riddle…thank to you!

  27. Tavish Chadha says:

    @Dagny: Thanks for your comments… so when r we seeing a F55 from you? :)

  28. Shilpa Garg says:

    Good one!! Liked it!!
    Keep them coming! :)

  29. Tavish Chadha says:

    Thanks Shilpa! :)

  30. Nilesh says:

    Am new to this so can't comment on it. But would like to comment on "I know its needless to say this but Ram and Sonia are fictitious characters and bear no resemblence to anybody living or on the verge of death.(I guess the dead wont mind)."

    People on the verge of death are still living, so why categorise them separately?

    Good blog you got here

  31. Tavish Chadha says:

    @Nilesh: u r the first one who notices that… well that was just for the heck of it… just trying to sound funny… am not sure if i did…i am sorry if it sounded creepy… thanks for appreciating my blog…

    cheers!
    Tavish

  32. Guria says:

    :D :D :D
    Most 55ers I feel are jokes re-told but this one was so refreshing!!
    How addicted we are, aren't we!! :))

  33. Tavish Chadha says:

    @Guria: hehehe I know I can understand the addiction… thanks for the comments! :)

  34. Rajlakshmi says:

    shift got stuck… now thats a horrible life problem :P
    interesting one :D

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